Jack in the Box
(A poetic response to "Sweet Like a Crow" by Michael Ondaatje)
(A poetic response to "Sweet Like a Crow" by Michael Ondaatje)
Your voice is like a hidden predator, lurking in the tall grass,
waiting patiently to strike.
Like a teacher counting backwards in the last seconds of a
test.
Like the muffled sound of the audience as you wait to mount
the stage.
Like a character in a horror movie about to enter the
basement,
unaware of the murderer concealed
in the shadows of the staircase.
Like an ascending minor scale.
Staring intently at a jack in the box and listening to the
falsely sweet tune as you wait for the jack to be freed of its prison.
Like waking up on a Saturday morning to finally discover
what will happen to your favourite character,
only to be met by a string of commercials.
Like watching someone blow a balloon and knowing
that no matter how many times they deny it,
the balloon has reached its maximum capacity.
Like a single key on a broken piano being pressed repeatedly.
The monotonous voice of the lonely robot,
trapped in the confines of an iphone and
freed only by the accidental press of the home button.
Playing a game of tag on the playground at lunch
and being interrupted by the school bell, calling you
inside.
Like walking down a deserted street at midnight,
like a
football being thrown at your stomach.
Like when I was standing on a bright white line amidst a sea of blue,
listening for the telltale click of a music player, and the grim voice of a man,
re minding us that our test begins in thirty seconds.
This is so good! Very Aneesa of you, dark and powerful.
ReplyDeleteHaha thanks Mikaela <3
DeleteWOW this is soooo good, i really the powerfulness of it like Mikaela said. And I love this line "Like a teacher counting backwards in the last seconds of a test" reminds me of Mr. Wilkie
ReplyDeleteGreat poem! I really like how it's very mysterious and vivid at the same time, and the ending is simply awesome. :)
ReplyDeleteYour similes are really descriptive!!
ReplyDeleteGreat Job Aneesa! I really adore how mysterious the poem is and the senses I obtain from it
ReplyDeletei love how its so dark and gloomy.... i agree with lucy about the mysteriousness of it!!!! <3 love it
ReplyDeleteReally vivid description relating to the real life!
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